This is a work written for the contest of
I wrote it on spot but that does not make me say that critique it keeping that information in mind. I wrote it simple and expressive. Not much mysteries or aspect of sorrow that many of my works portray.
Though I have not been in love, I do wonder what the people who have experienced the feeling, are willing to do for a loved one. This poem is an embodiment of that perspective of mine.
For those who are kind enough to critique:1. Did you enjoy the work?
2. Did the flow seem natural or did the expressions feel painfully forced together?
3. Did the analogies, limit of love work well or did it feel like random, unproductive ramble?
4. Did the ending go well?
5. General comments.
Thank you!Edit: I have changed the line "A thousand dreams I dreamed" in the third stanza to "A thousand prayers I prayed" so that it does not conflict with the ending. That is the only change. Does it seem fine?