literature

Broken Glasses

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The tale began with my trudge down the road.
Hidden faces piercing me; were I some sort of a show?
But I was broken, broken within my heart.
And so I realized too late,
but even before I could have realized, my glasses broke.

If I were to wear them,
would appear the people,
who imitated my friends.
But sculptures too erode; they're nothing anymore,
through my broken glasses.

I once sensed the feel,
were I lost in lost spaces;
for them I wasn't even real.
Nothing more I'll be, they still jeer at me,
while I wear broken glasses.

She did love me once,
such long time ago,
when times were not tense.
But breaking a pledge? That I shall never forget
while I wear broken glasses.

But still rose those whispers "It was you who never knew them"
Then I realized that all I see, I realized all I feel
is not reality; for hidden was the truth within.
Within the faces piercing,
for I saw these faces after my glasses broke.

In truth were they true friends,
merry tunes in silence of grief,
but late it is for amends!
The eroding gale, to see, I failed,
with my broken glasses.

Their wait was for one man,
one reminiscing recalled;
an old friend, a companion.
But I misjudged their smiles for scorn,
through my broken glasses.

Her love was so true,
only had I accepted,
alas I was cruel!
Am I even worth to be loved,
with my broken glasses?

The tale ended, when I had passed the road.
No stares pulling on me, as if I were all alone.
But I was broken, broken within my heart.
And so I realized too late;
that I should have taken off my glasses when my glasses broke.
This is one of the first songs that I wrote and it is about a person who percieves things in a diffrent light due to what he speaks of as, Broken Glasses.

This is realization and sadness combined and has great depth but it totally depends on the reader whether he percieves this or not.

For This work I would REALLY want some critiques:

1. Did you enjoy the poem/song? If yes, then why, if no then why?

2. Did this sound more like a poem with fine rhyming/meter/form or felt better as a song?

3. Most important question What did broken glasses mean to you?

4. General comments.

Thank you!
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Chezzy-Am's avatar
Something Simon and Garfunkel would have been happy to sing about.

But then again, they had "The Sound of Silence" so I can't complain :)