This is my first proper Haiku (if I have incorrect syllable count please tell!) and it is an entry for the scratch that contest hosted by
in which the form was Haiku and the theme was bondage. Just for elaboration, this work is a subtle expression of bondage. It can be taken both as a servant of old working late night for a master as well as a general Mistress/Master slave relationship. I don't want to impose any of the meanings and would hope that you tell which interpretation did you feel more prominent. I am personally not happy over the the form and theme... but I think I pulled off well enough! But I will let the readers decide.
For people who are kind enough to critique:1. Did the theme of Bondage "shine" through?
2. What meaning was it that you inferred from this?
3. Of what quality was it in terms of Haiku?
4. General comments (and correction if syllable count of 5-7-5 is messed).
Thank you!Well I think I will keep the first Haiku and until I find someone to give the second one to, I will make it another deviation. While I had a problem with the rating or perhaps the perspectives over the title in some critiques, I am grateful for them as well as for all the comments and I won't lie when I say that I kept everyone's thought in mind when making my decision. I will also say that I would love critical critiques on other works as well although perhaps I should make the "controversial" works unavailable for critiques since mostly the critique is about the theme... and while I love discussions, I don't prefer them affecting the rating nevertheless, all thank you for all opinions and more critiques and thoughts are always welcome!