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There was one time when you thought I,
was perfect, no defects to hide.
Impressed were all, imposed a lot,
On all your minds, but you knew not.
The truth of me, the lies I hide,
I do not lie, but hide I might.
Whatever way, deceived you are.
Blinded by, a truth so far,
So unreal, you cannot grasp.
Believe or not, its truth alas,
But hate me not, that's who I am,
But that's for me, to you I am,
Or tried to be, tried very hard.
To be a friend, one true at heart,
To help you out, fulfill your needs,
Play a small role in your deeds.
Intention wise, I will not lie,
The one thing which I ever tried,
Was to bring a smile alive,
On your lips, to do I'd die,
That's all I ask, not hair breadth much,
Erase my life, if you feel must,
From your life, your memory,
But one last thing before I leave.
Hate me if you feel to hate.
Just don't make the mistakes I made.
For, who I am, I am not proud,
Truth is that I myself doubt.
What I was, I lived in pain,
My life was shadowed in constant rain,
The reason why I smiled a lot,
From inside I decayed and rot.
I hate myself as much you do,
Yes that's the truth, I'm laughing too!
For cried I have too much that I,
Cant cry no more, so Laugh do I.
Forget me now, thanks for your time.
You do your work now that I've done mine.
This is one of the oldest poems I wrote after "The Maiden" and it reflected one of the many parts of me. I am not the most perfect person for you rather I am not perfect in any sense.

I make mistakes partly because I am human and partly because I am me. But rarely is it the case that I say something to offend you unless you started it! and I never really intend to hurt your feelings. Of course, you may not know every darkest secret of mine but that is none of your purpose to put it bluntly. Anyways i hope you enjoy!
Critiques appreciated!
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sofialf Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
This is very engaging, i really hope it carried on. It's flowy and you can clearly see that you've been truthful with it. The words aren't forced at all, and the work was paid off with the amazing result. Congratulations!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really appreciate you reading this work - it is one of my oldest and 'honest' works - very rare I guess. Thank you again for reading it :huggle:
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Cinders8328 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I do, and I like this expression of you!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad you do :) haha you do? I am flattered :)
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Cinders8328 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! :D
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botanicaloca Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
Yeap, this certainly has floored me ^^
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha.. I hope you like... the "real me" xD not that I am VERY dark :( I am just dark ^^ (not dark colored >.< )
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botanicaloca Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
Hahahaa is ok, I really enjoy the work and it certainly reflects a lot of the happenings of the soul. Not all of us a light guided.., as Mr., Gray often says.. we walk along the Gray paths... and as Mohini would respond: This is why we are all dual.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:O I can write a poem on that and dedicate it to your characters :D Give me, IF possible, some dialogue of theirs that you feel is somewhat philosophical and you can give away (a portion only) and I will write a poem over it :D
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botanicaloca Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
Ohhh that would be absolutely amazing!!!!! Both characters are dual, I am going to PM you a bit of their dialogue yes?
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