Okay... so this is not my typical writing style. I don't format works at all... (I do perhaps bold the crux of the work or format it completely but not in this way). This was for a competition by
which needed formatting so I did it. I do realize that at the moment the story and emotions will not be the same as uneditted but try to ignore that for the time being (The judges won't be ignoring that). I removed the formatting
Hopefully the like it... I would like suggestions over editting since I am new to it. Any feedback is welcome, both for the work and the formatting but please don't include the formatting in the ratting if you critique. I don't want a 2 star in impact because someone did not like the formatting. That said, I will again ask to comment on the formatting as well. Separately perhaps.
There is a little reference to the "Chamber door" I know... I added it intentionally. Also, this work intermixes another work of mine which is one of my most well written works. When I upload that, you might know.edit: I added a final stanza and made a few tweaks
For those kind enough to critique:
1. Since it is a poem to be formatted, do critique on the formatting with the story.
2. Now ignoring the formatting, did you enjoy the work (copy onto Word if you want).
3. Was the storyline vague or did it register well?
4. Any favorite line/portion you may have?
5. General comments.
Thank you!Edit: I went on to the next round! Good for me! Now I have removed the editing for those who were distracted by it (no hard feelings to the wonderful group) but I also have the edited version (with myself) so if someone needs it (I don't think they will) they can ask!