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I am unable to grasp the complete concept of this work but the reflection of the moonlight on waters surface is one thing that managed to hit me. But to be honest I did not try to understand it that much since it managed to give off a wonderful feel.

The non-italic stanza's are like a chorus and while the repetition didn't register that much to me, I did like the expressions used. Then the Italics play with words, giving an eerie touch to the seemingly sad work. The chorus feels sad and the italics feel eerie in a nice way. as in I enjoyed the work.

So, sadly, I was unable to grasp the work but I did enjoy the read. Short and touching in a strange fashion.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
It's about sadness, a man/woman unable to be moved, silent but with such profound depths that are yet unexplored.
I plea for them to lay bare their depths and shed their tears tonight.

I had this weird idea of using the moon and the way it can move the water as it creates it's tides. The halo in the sky would be the moon ^^;
As it's silent unmoving, the water will reflect it identically without showing us who or what he/she really is.
So if he/she'd shed the tears the water surface would move..
a bit silly perhaps, but hey xd
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eh ^^; I did get the Halo in the sky was the moon but... nah i didn't get the idea at all the way you put it. That might be because I connect concepts logically.
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
At least you enjoyed the piece I hope :p?
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yup. you can say that :nod:
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