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This is a short but meaningful work. What I specifically like about it is that it speaks figuratively yet the expressions are not vague. I like how one reads and gets what you are saying. From the start, it seemed like a different topic but as you went on, I felt like... you wrote it on the spur and converged two seperate thoughts; one was of ignoring people who only know how to argue or show hate. Two, to be together with someone.

The rhythm that you have is quite nice. I wnjoyed reading it regardless of the meaning. It felt balanced and well worded.

The fact that this theme does not go on about love and this and that rather it stresses on being TOGETHER with someone, is quite sweet.

The ending... was surprisingly simple yet well written. The way you simply state that while pasing a vacant expance, try to pass it together... quite sweet.

Over all a wonderful read!
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
Oh wow thank you so much for this critique! I am so happy you enjoyed it and I appreciate your thoughts very much! Thank you! :tighthug: :heart:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome :huggle: I took quite some time to reach it though ^^; I hope I wasn't too late :D
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
Of course it wasn't late! I appreciate it very much when someone has enough to say to write a critique on something I wrote anytime. Thank you so much again! :heart:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hehe you are welcome :heart:
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